Towards the end the story got so messy. Probably because it is about young adults that are quite dumb, easily influenced, and are lead by unhealthy love interests. This great plan that was executed so badly with so many mistakes. It feels so messily written yet so realistic. (Although I still can't quite believe why character #2 didn't go up to character #1 immediately when #2 saw #1 in the moring. She could've asked: "Hey #1, why would you let me bleed to death, did you know i would've survived? what would've you done if someone found my dead body and the evidence on my neck that would've encriminated you?").
Srsly #1 returned possibly without knowing if #2 was alive. If #2's body would've been found with evidence against #1, #1 would've been immediately locked up. What then? Is #1 and #1's secret ally is just stupid?
Anyway, moral of the story, if you want to have a war; have an actual good plan and give tasks to people that can do them. And if they can't then don't give them the same task again.
They chose a half measure when they should've gone all the way.
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this story will have you looking in the mirror afterwards like "oh. oh no"
Came to jerk it, left crying. 10/10 storytelling
10/10 what a journey reading through this, I was captivated from start to finish.
Upon finishing it said I unlocked an afterstory, but i've not been able to figure out how to do that. How do you access the afterstory?
it's on the title screen. click the epilogue.
good grief.. 9.82/10.00
5/5 AWESOME
explodes
I love it.
Towards the end the story got so messy. Probably because it is about young adults that are quite dumb, easily influenced, and are lead by unhealthy love interests. This great plan that was executed so badly with so many mistakes. It feels so messily written yet so realistic. (Although I still can't quite believe why character #2 didn't go up to character #1 immediately when #2 saw #1 in the moring. She could've asked: "Hey #1, why would you let me bleed to death, did you know i would've survived? what would've you done if someone found my dead body and the evidence on my neck that would've encriminated you?").
Srsly #1 returned possibly without knowing if #2 was alive. If #2's body would've been found with evidence against #1, #1 would've been immediately locked up. What then? Is #1 and #1's secret ally is just stupid?
Anyway, moral of the story, if you want to have a war; have an actual good plan and give tasks to people that can do them. And if they can't then don't give them the same task again.
They chose a half measure when they should've gone all the way.